These are some choice quotes from essays I had to grade recently. The students were expected to choose two Nobel Peace Prize winners and describe their achievements. Keep in mind this is an upper division class, meaning Juniors and Seniors....might give you a bit of a scare.
"Woodrow Wilson had been recognized for the peace program in his Fourteen Points and his work in achieving inclusion of the Covenant of the League of Nations in the 1919 Treaty of Versailles. Having done so, Wilson began to be acknowledged for his surprising support in the reform of the Nation. The cause of peace and the cause of truth are of one relation. Woodrow Wilson had been elected President of the United States at the time of the acceptance of the Nobel Piece Prize."
Yes, not the Peace Prize but the Piece Prize!!! Hello! Where do I even begin with the red pen! The scary part is most of the essays are like this, the good ones are the exception.
Same essay....
"Wilson's pursuit to change views of American education in ways that would benefit the students in a positive and more useful formed system is similar to social conformity. In pursuit of his idealized intellectual life for democratically chosen students, he wanted to change the admission system, the academic system, the social system, even the architectural layout of the campus. The ideas Woodrow Wilson had on education is similar to social conformity in respect to having orthodox views from which people can feel accepted."
New essay, same horrors.
"When looking at all the Noble Prize winners through out decades we can see that there is many important recognize people globally. In choosing two Noble prize winners was very difficult to choose from, since there are a lot of them. The ones that caught my attention and seem interesting upon their accomplishments were Wangari Maathai and Rigoberta Menchu."
I'm going to drink now.
"Woodrow Wilson had been recognized for the peace program in his Fourteen Points and his work in achieving inclusion of the Covenant of the League of Nations in the 1919 Treaty of Versailles. Having done so, Wilson began to be acknowledged for his surprising support in the reform of the Nation. The cause of peace and the cause of truth are of one relation. Woodrow Wilson had been elected President of the United States at the time of the acceptance of the Nobel Piece Prize."
Yes, not the Peace Prize but the Piece Prize!!! Hello! Where do I even begin with the red pen! The scary part is most of the essays are like this, the good ones are the exception.
Same essay....
"Wilson's pursuit to change views of American education in ways that would benefit the students in a positive and more useful formed system is similar to social conformity. In pursuit of his idealized intellectual life for democratically chosen students, he wanted to change the admission system, the academic system, the social system, even the architectural layout of the campus. The ideas Woodrow Wilson had on education is similar to social conformity in respect to having orthodox views from which people can feel accepted."
New essay, same horrors.
"When looking at all the Noble Prize winners through out decades we can see that there is many important recognize people globally. In choosing two Noble prize winners was very difficult to choose from, since there are a lot of them. The ones that caught my attention and seem interesting upon their accomplishments were Wangari Maathai and Rigoberta Menchu."
I'm going to drink now.
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